|
Cancer
Jul 15, 2006 9:40:29 GMT
Post by church on Jul 15, 2006 9:40:29 GMT
Cancer
As I lay there in my bed more dead than live eyes wide with terror, as doctor’s eye me lying in the corners, huddled in their packs. Preparing their most precious of rituals the act of covering their backs!
Whilst nurses rush to and fro not daring to look for fear of catching that most deadly of mans disease’s…GUILT.
Visitors come and go false hope dripping from their faces, reeking of the lies they spread crippling me further, for they damm well know im gone though still here a living symbol of hope lost and hope most false suffering to listen to their lies in silence.
Silence.
Silently screaming out for death. As the cancer of the human race sweeps across my mind: corrupting polluting torturing and rapping the innocence from my mind, nothing is left behind. This is what I die of… This is what I die of…
|
|
|
Cancer
Jul 28, 2006 9:10:08 GMT
Post by Ceri on Jul 28, 2006 9:10:08 GMT
Nice one. Your poetry isn't half dark, Patches, but there's something about it that I like. Good writing style, I guess. You could try writing something a little more light-hearted, though, something about love or friendship instead of death. I mean, the death is good but it's a little heavy. Anyway, I like it
|
|
|
Cancer
Jul 28, 2006 16:17:44 GMT
Post by church on Jul 28, 2006 16:17:44 GMT
hmm well i do have a poem called it came to me in a toilet but apart from that ther is nothing happy in my current repitor i could do somthing nice but not right now i just got back from holiday to find i'm going for another week in 3 weeks.
|
|
|
Cancer
Jul 28, 2006 18:17:14 GMT
Post by naed on Jul 28, 2006 18:17:14 GMT
Perhaps young one there is a place in oblivion for you, Lord dagon could make use of your poetry and he's hard to please. welldone
|
|
|
Cancer
Jul 28, 2006 18:27:45 GMT
Post by church on Jul 28, 2006 18:27:45 GMT
err ok i think thats a complement, wait isnt lord dagon the bad guy?
|
|
|
Cancer
Jul 28, 2006 20:57:40 GMT
Post by naed on Jul 28, 2006 20:57:40 GMT
Bad in the terms of the Nine but there is one true leader among our ranks and that is lord dagon! all hail lord dagon
|
|